Diário em redação

Tô colocando aqui o dia de ontem ( Domingo, 27/7/2008 ) como uma espécie de diário em Inglês pra ajudar a galera com redação. Muita gente sente muitas dificuldades em conectar as informações ao escrever. Dêem uma olhada, coloquei em destaque 10 pontos, algumas construções que os brasileiros ou não sabem, ou tendem a escrever como uma tradução do que é pensado em Português, ao pé da letra.

My family and I had a very nice day yesterday. We enjoyed ourselves doing a lot of interesting things.
I woke up a little after 7:30 a.m and, as it happens every day, my dog "Marmota" went crazy as soon as I called him a few seconds after getting up.
I took my bike and went to Aterro do Flamengo in order to exercise a little. The weather was great: sunny and cool.
I spent one hour riding and, before coming back home, I went to the supermarket to buy bread and matte for breakfast.
At home, it took us about 30 minutes to eat and get ready to go to the beach.
Then, we went to Barra da Tijuca by car, got there at 12:30 and spent two hours there.
After that we went to a restaurant to have lunch. We ate pizza, drank coke and watched a soccer match on TV.
Finally, in the evening, we played Burnout Revenge, had dinner at 9 o´clock, talked on the phone, took a shower and went to bed.